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第十七章思过堂下

Added 2022-12-12 18:36:45 +0000 UTC

##第十七章思过堂下

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感觉这部分内容，虽然挺重口，但也挺重要的，毕竟思过堂算是个从开头就有铺垫的剧情。现在感觉内容上稍微有一点点潦草，只有这一章的后半段是真正在思过堂里了，最后总感觉就是没能看出来思过堂到底对银雪有没有多少威慑力。（或许在下一章有？）再就是这种小说不描写心理活动，写的时候很多程度上要靠人物的行动和语言，人物和周围其他人或者东西的交互就很重要。最后一段烧烤的时候，感觉处刑的方式和银雪的反应割裂开了。从“随后，两个狱卒”那段开始，到最后晕倒，好像很少有银雪对环境的反馈。最后银雪昏倒到送回去的两段就是单纯地描述很痛苦。不过确实如果再具体写的话口味也会更重，就还是会非常难写。

2022-12-13 04:17:31 +0000 UTC

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